Hey Aysha, it's good to see I'm not the only one who used the screenshot method!
I think your paper seems both well researched and considered so far; you have a clear outline and mode of progression.
You have plenty of information Catalina, which will serve you well in your analysis of her actions and motives. However, I'd probably spend more time reflecting on the time period at large, namely feelings toward self-fashioning. You clearly allot space for this, but I think you may want to do expand on it more.
Again, you have a wealth of information about Catalina, and some accompanying well-developed arguments. I would just focus more on how her acts (or others' similar actions) were individually unique, but tied into greater social trends at the time.
This will certainly be an interesting paper and I look forward to the final product!
I think that you've got a good format for your paper. Everything seems pretty clear and well thought out. Comparing Catalina's narrative to other women of her time should be very interesting, especially given the contrast with the other narrative you've chosen. (she signed her name in blood?? creepy) I might make it clear when you look at the scholarship dedicated to self-fashioning and the fluidity of identity that you disagree with their arguments, and maybe point out some passages from Catalina's book within those paragraphs to prove that their arguments don't always hold water. That's all I can think of right now!
Great, really organized outline! It shows your thought process very well I think.
My only suggestion is in the last part connecting her narrative style to her assertion of manhood (which, I think, is really the crux of your argument) that you address the counterargument a little bit more. Maybe only women's narratives were self-reflective and this is why she chose her style? I'm sure you've already thought about this, but just make sure to address it.
Aysha, I love your topic and primary source! You seem to have done some in depth thinking about her. I find the idea of self-fashioning fascinating, but I agree with Billy that maybe it should take a larger place in your paper.
I also maybe would make your definition of what a full transformation would be? Im just worried that may start getting into gender studies debate about transgendered individuals, which I believe you mentioned you didnt really want to delve into? Also do you mean society was never able to see her as a man or she was never able to?
I'm glad you're including Sor Juana Ines de la Cruz, mainly because I really enjoy some of her poetry. Anyway, I think it's interesting to mention full transformations, but it raises several questions for me. Was Erauso really trying to become a man, or rather do some of the things men did? Also, in what ways were New World boundaries more permeable? Sor Juana was, after all, a nun in Hispanicized Mexico. New Spain, unlike many English settlements in America, did in fact replicate peerage and many institutions of Europe. This is all for you to ponder though, and you're obviously free to argue against this.
Hi Aysha, Last week you were brainstorming and tentatively outlining some of the points you brought up in here, and I feel like you really pulled those points together into a strong argumentative future paper here. Great work! No real suggestions, it looks good.
Looks like you are well on your way-- you have a solid structure to your argument!
I like your point about how she was "cross-dressing through narrative." Where is the line between self-fashioning by assuming a male-gendered discourse in ones narrative, and failing to fully "self-fashion" (in the sense that you argue she never was fully transformed)?
Hey Aysha, it's good to see I'm not the only one who used the screenshot method!
ReplyDeleteI think your paper seems both well researched and considered so far; you have a clear outline and mode of progression.
You have plenty of information Catalina, which will serve you well in your analysis of her actions and motives. However, I'd probably spend more time reflecting on the time period at large, namely feelings toward self-fashioning. You clearly allot space for this, but I think you may want to do expand on it more.
Again, you have a wealth of information about Catalina, and some accompanying well-developed arguments. I would just focus more on how her acts (or others' similar actions) were individually unique, but tied into greater social trends at the time.
This will certainly be an interesting paper and I look forward to the final product!
Hey Aysha,
ReplyDeleteI think that you've got a good format for your paper. Everything seems pretty clear and well thought out. Comparing Catalina's narrative to other women of her time should be very interesting, especially given the contrast with the other narrative you've chosen. (she signed her name in blood?? creepy) I might make it clear when you look at the scholarship dedicated to self-fashioning and the fluidity of identity that you disagree with their arguments, and maybe point out some passages from Catalina's book within those paragraphs to prove that their arguments don't always hold water. That's all I can think of right now!
Hi Aysha,
ReplyDeleteGreat, really organized outline! It shows your thought process very well I think.
My only suggestion is in the last part connecting her narrative style to her assertion of manhood (which, I think, is really the crux of your argument) that you address the counterargument a little bit more. Maybe only women's narratives were self-reflective and this is why she chose her style? I'm sure you've already thought about this, but just make sure to address it.
Aysha, I love your topic and primary source! You seem to have done some in depth thinking about her. I find the idea of self-fashioning fascinating, but I agree with Billy that maybe it should take a larger place in your paper.
ReplyDeleteI also maybe would make your definition of what a full transformation would be? Im just worried that may start getting into gender studies debate about transgendered individuals, which I believe you mentioned you didnt really want to delve into? Also do you mean society was never able to see her as a man or she was never able to?
I'm glad you're including Sor Juana Ines de la Cruz, mainly because I really enjoy some of her poetry. Anyway, I think it's interesting to mention full transformations, but it raises several questions for me. Was Erauso really trying to become a man, or rather do some of the things men did? Also, in what ways were New World boundaries more permeable? Sor Juana was, after all, a nun in Hispanicized Mexico. New Spain, unlike many English settlements in America, did in fact replicate peerage and many institutions of Europe. This is all for you to ponder though, and you're obviously free to argue against this.
ReplyDeleteHi Aysha,
ReplyDeleteLast week you were brainstorming and tentatively outlining some of the points you brought up in here, and I feel like you really pulled those points together into a strong argumentative future paper here. Great work! No real suggestions, it looks good.
Looks like you are well on your way-- you have a solid structure to your argument!
ReplyDeleteI like your point about how she was "cross-dressing through narrative." Where is the line between self-fashioning by assuming a male-gendered discourse in ones narrative, and failing to fully "self-fashion" (in the sense that you argue she never was fully transformed)?